Words that Move Donors to Give
Words that evoke interpersonal involvement move donors to give, but according to a recent doctoral dissertation on fundraising language, the industry does a poor job at it. Frank C. Dickerson, Ph.D. used corpus linguistics to review and measure fundraisers’ letters to donors. He found that we write more to inform rather than involve and concluded that the former is ineffective.
Twenty-three linguistic features rose to the surface of effective written solicitations. Dickerson suggests that by using these features we would raise more money because we are connecting through interpersonal involvement.
Review the chart below to see how parts of Dickerson’s sample letter “Help Send Carley to Camp” are constructed. The letter can be read in its entirety here.
|Linguistic Feature||Characteristics the Create Interpersonal Involvement||Example|
|Private verb||Expresses mental thoughts and feelings||I felt my heart break;
I know you’ve helped
|THAT-deletion||Sounds conversational||You could tell [that] her 10-year old…|
|Contractions||Adds fluency to discourse||I’ve never slept in a tent before|
|Present tense verbs||Depicts immediate topics and actions||Tears almost come…|
|1st person pronouns||Marks ego involvement||I could tell;
I know you’ve helped before
|2nd person pronouns||Shows interaction||Would you be willing to help?|
|Amplifiers||Magnification of verbal force||For Carley’s mom $20 is very precious|
|Adverbs||Reveals stance, qualities, feelings||… truly unable…|
|Possibility models||States possible reality||Could you help us once more?|
|Final prepositions||Reflects surface reduction||… simply don’t know where it would come from|
You can read Dickerson’s article here to see the entire list of linguistic features and see the full “Carley” letter as well as an example of a similar letter that is highly informational and therefore ineffective.